This essay will consider the merits of both approaches.
Coherence and cohesion are good because it's
very easy to read and follow
the arguments in each paragraph and to see clearly that each body paragraph
has one controlling idea i.e.
Body 1: Benefits of providing help and support directly to those in need
Body 2: Benefits of donating to national and international charities
Transitional phrases and
words are also
used well to guide the user
through the ideas:
The first advantage of providing direct support is...
For example...
...on the other hand...
Another benefit is that...
...not only..but also...
There are advantages, however,...
First and foremost...
Not only this,...
In conclusion,...
The conclusion gives the writer's opinion very clearly.
The essay also has a wide range of grammatical structures and a high level
of grammatical accuracy.
Zoo Essay
In this IELTS Zoo Essay you have to discuss
whether you think zoos are
cruel and should be shut down or whether they are useful as they protect
some wild animals.
Essays on zoos have appeared in the IELTS
test before and this was a
question that was recently in the test.
Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down.
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