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Essay Writing and Research AN 10000BA

Introductory Paragraph Correction Sheet

Spring Semester, 2015/16
(I) The paragraphs below—disregarding some minor or, in some cases, major stylistic or grammatical errors—are model paragraphs since structurally they are nicely-built, heading towards a particular thesis, which is the essence of an introduction. You are asked to highlight the theme and thesis of these paragraphs, as well as to correct all potential mistakes with care.
(1) In Forster’s “A Room with a View,” each of the main characters personifies a typical figure of the turn of the twentieth century. The author gives a true description about the middle class society and people, their lifestyle, their habits and their approach to relationships. The latter has a stressed importance in the novel. In this respect, one of the most interesting characters is Lucy Honeychurch’s fiancé, Cecil Vyse. Despite the fact that he is introduced as if he was not suitable for being a husband, he impersonates the ideal of the Victorian era. The only reason why he is not the male protagonist is that he accidentally falls in love with a woman who has a more modern personality and who is the forerunner of a new era.
(2) Women’s Position in A Room with a View by E. M. Forster

Women’s position has been analysed a multitude of times over the last century. E. M. Forster’s A Room with a View gives a perfect stance of the problem timed at the turn of the century. The novel brings up the question of independence of women, which is described by the happenings around Lucy Honeychurch. Meeting with the Emersons, who are strong believers in the equality of men and women, Lucy finds it difficult to get over the frustration by the limitations put on her sex. Her fiancé, Cecil is not in love with Lucy but keeps comparing her to a work of art, which shows that she is only thought to be an inanimate object. In my essay I shall explore the boundaries of women in the context of Forster’s novel.

(3) The Significance of the Art

In A Room with a View E. M. Forster employs images of Italian art, alluding to famous works from the Medieval and the Renaissance periods to illustrate the opinions, feelings, and personalities of the main characters occurring in the narrative. With this two eras Foster divides the characters into two groups: Cecil, the fiancé of, Lucy Honeychurch, the female protagonist, belongs to/represents the Medieval one, because he appears as a “gothic statue,” gloomy and unapproachable for the others, while George and to a certain extent Lucy herself belong to/signify the Renaissance. Since the term means rebirth it symbolises that Lucy and George as well as their blooming love represent something new with respect to their life and to the Edwardian era, too. This clearly shows that for Forster the different aesthetics can express real human feelings and attitudes. With the help of employing different art forms and specific artefacts the characters are able to undermine the strength of social expectations, to make their own decisions, and to create their own identities.

(4) Lucy Honeychurch as an alter ego of Charlotte Bartlett in Forster’s A Room with a View

A Room with a View is about Lucy Honeychurch’s coming of age and what events and decisions led her to what she became by the end of the novel. By either fate of chance she is given a possibility to break out of her dull, pretentious life. It is her rebellious nature, Mr. Emerson’s benevolence and most importantly the growing freedom of women that eventually allows her make decisions based on her emotions not on the expectations of society. As it is hinted throughout the novel, Charlotte Bartlett faced similar decisions when she was the same age. Essentially Charlotte and Lucy are the very same character divided only by a few but very important years that allow Lucy to rebel and made Charlotte the tiresome spinster by the time when the novel takes place.
(5) The Emersons’ Effect On Lucy

Forster’s novel A Room With A View contains several people with their own perspective of understanding life, and throughout the novel they effect Lucy, changing her ideas of life and helping the development of her personality. The Emerson family is the most important in this aspect as Mr. Emerson lectures Lucy many times, starting a process in which Lucy becomes a modern woman. The Emersons represent a liberal way of thinking and it is appealing to Lucy from the very beginning of the novel, as it can be said that she comes from a liberal environment at home. This essay will detail what exactly the Emersons think of the world, how this effects Lucy on the long term and what kind of contrast there is between this way of thinking and the more conservative way represented by Cecil.

(II) Firstly, identify and also formulate in two or more words the most tangible mistakes that characterise the paragraphs below in general. Additionally, do search for all further types of mistakes, too, as far as style, structure, grammar, spelling, etc. are concerned:

(1) A room with or without a view - through Forster’s eyes

In the beginning of the 20th century differences between classes were still a problem. E.M. Forster, living in this world, could perfectly experience this kind of differentiation. He was the part of a middle class family so he could easily examine the nature of people from other classes and cultures. And he happily did. The book “A room with a view” written in 1908 is his most optimistic work. Even the title of the book is a metaphor for a world without the laws of what is considered “good”; and the story is all about sometimes class is not everything even for the British. Forster can absolutely show us the class features of that era through Lucy’s eyes. We have two doors to step in: one of them leads to a room without a view - it means to be loyal to our standards on the cost of our happiness. The other one provides us a room with a view – it is mostly about following our hearts; leaving us without social norms. During the next few lines I am going to analyse every single class appearing in the novel and trying to find the perfect answer for the question above.

(2) The character of Lucy Honeychurch and Charlotte Bartlett

The two most exciting character in E. M. Forster’s novel ‘A Room with a View’ are Lucy Honeychurch and Charlotte Bartlett. They are cousins and both of them have very special personality. Lucy is young, nice, open-minded lady whereas Charlotte is older, conservative and she has a more aristocratic way of thinking. They belong to the upper-middle class, which is influence their appearance and behaviour. Once they travel to Italy where they both change a little bit.

(3) Warm rays of sunlight sliding down the hillsides. Leafy trees' shadows covering the entrance of marble churches opposite. The smell of a lazy morning spiced with freshly-baked bread and tobacco coming from a pipe of a pension guest smoking under the window. A view of the Arno, the sound of birds singing disturbed by loud, dinamic voices of the passing-by Italians. I can imagine Lucy's sight of Florence looking out the window after a good night's sleep, thinking about the strange young man she met the day before. . . .
(4) „Now, don’t be stupid over this. I don’t require you to fall in love with my boy, but I do think you might try and understand him. . . . Let yourself go. Pull out from the depths those thoughts that you do not understand, and spread them out into the sunlight and know the meaning of them. By understanding George you may learn to understand yourself. „ (Forster 25) Mr. Emerson’s prediction became real after all. . . .
(5) When we first meet with George Emerson, we only know that he is Mr. Emerson’s son. Although, there are few signs of his personnage, there is mystery around him. Is he a child? Is he a wise man? . . .
(6) E. M. Forster was one of the most famous English writers on the turn of the 19th and 20th centuries. A Room with a View, which was written in 1908, is one of his best-known novels. The novel clearly presents two completely different societies’ way of thinking and views. . . .
(7) Opposites attract each other – as the saying goes. But the question arises is it really true for totally different people or just for magnets? In this novel two kind of people shown up. Medieval thinking and modernism counter to each other. It sheds light on life hundred years ago how people had to live, go to dances or just what and with who women could do and what do they want to do now.
(8) Love through Barricades

They say love is the most powerful phenomenon in the whole world. People start wars in the name of love, they kill for love, and what is more, they sacrifice and can leave all behind without hesitation just for a chance to be loved even if it lasts for a moment. The experience is: once you fell in love, say goodbye to your sober mind. Of course, nothing is that bad as it seems to be for the first sight. Love is worth fighting for. Any doubts? George Emerson can dissipate them, I am sure.

(9) The book has quite a few different contraries in it, one of these is the difference between the characters. Cecil and George are main characters with completely opposite personalities.

Considering their inner qualities, Cecil definitely has medieval, whereas George has renaissance characteristics. On one hand a medieval person is controlling, likes to have power over everything, and also somewhat forceful. All these apply to Cecil, for example the way he treats Lucy. He asks her to marry him three times. Moreover once she agrees he is very controlling with her. He sees Lucy not for herself but as a vision of someone he can hang on to. Cecil also treats all the other people without any respect and friendliness. He is certainly full of himself and always tries to be manly but actually is really self-consious and awkward. All in all he is a dislikable person who despises all the people in Lucy’s town. Moreover Cecil is more religious than anyone else in the novel and he is not open-minded, but afraid of the new, which is also a typical characteristic of the medieval people. . . .

(10) . . . This incident shows that whether you are ’rich’ or ’poor’, one thing is true: ’Do not judge a book by its cover’.

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