The
conclusion summarises the
writers opinion very clearly. It is always
important to make it very clear what your opinion is if it is an opinion essay
(you could put your opinion in the introduction too if you wish).
The
grammar and
vocabulary are appropriate,
with a mix of complex
sentences and topic related vocabulary.
The
content of the essay is also appropriate. It clearly addresses both
opinions and provides a number of points to support each argument. The
ideas are clearly explained and will not cause any misunderstanding for
someone reading the essay.