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of university is to secure a better job.) and when the writer is moving
onto the next opinion (However, there are other benefits for individuals
and society.).
Connectors (To begin... Also... Firstly... Secondly) are used well to
introduce each new supporting idea. Further connectors (For example...A
case in point is that...As a result...) are used to expand on these ideas.
Finally, the writer has demonstrated that they are able to use complex
sentence structures (While...that...in order to...as...), and has discussed
both views and combined this with his/her opinion, thus ensuring the
question has been answered.

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Reducing Crime Essay
IELTS essays can be on a variety of topics, and this writing sample is
about reducing crime.
As with the previous essay, there are two opinions, and you must discuss
each one and your opinion must also be given.
In the previous essay, the writers opinion was given in the conclusion. In this
one, a separate body paragraph discusses the writers opinion.
If you do this thought you have to be very careful not to just repeat what you
have said in a previous paragraph into the third paragraph.
It has to be something new.
Model Answer

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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer
prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways
of reducing crime.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Crime is a serious and growing problem in most societies. Although many
people believe that the best way to tackle this is to place people in prison for
longer periods, others are of the opinion that other measures will be more
effective.
There are benefits of giving offenders longer prison sentences. Firstly,
spending a long time in prison provides an opportunity for the prison
services to rehabilitate a prisoner. For example, someone who has committed
a serious offence such as assault will need a long time in prison in order to
be sure they can be re-educated not to re-offend. In addition to this, longer
prison sentences will act as a deterrent for someone who is thinking of
committing a crime.
However, some people argue that leaving people in prison for a long time
means that they will mix with other criminals and so their character will not
improve. One alternative is community service. This gives an offender the
opportunity to give something positive back to society, and so it may
improve their character. Also, the government could focus its resources on
the causes of crime, which would lead to less crime in the future.
In my opinion, it is important to look at alternative methods. Many countries
have lengthy prison sentences, but crime has continued to increase
throughout the world, so it is clear that this is not completely effective. That
said, long prison sentences should remain for those who commit serious
crimes such as assault or murder, as justice for the victim and their family
should take priority.
To conclude, there are good arguments for and against long sentences, so
governments must continue to research the various methods of crime
reduction to ensure effective policies are in place.
(290 words)

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