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The IELTS diet and health essay has a number of good points which would
means it would score highly in the test. 
The introduction clearly introduces the topic and sets out both sides of the
issue. There is then a clear thesis statement to explain what the essay will
do:
This essay will examine both sides of the argument.
Coherence and cohesion are evident from the topic sentences which make
the subject of each paragraph very clear:
There is no doubt that individuals must take some responsibility for
their diet and health. Despite these arguments, there is also a case for
advocating the intervention of the state.
Transitional phrases and words also guide the reader through the essay.
For example:
The argument to support this is... 
Children are also becoming less healthy. 
However, their parents...
Despite these arguments, there is also...
Some governments also spend...
Having considered both sides of the issue, 

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The conclusion summarises the writers opinion very clearly. It is always
important to make it very clear what your opinion is if it is an opinion essay
(you could put your opinion in the introduction too if you wish). 
The grammar and vocabulary are appropriate, with a mix of complex
sentences and topic related vocabulary. 
The content of the essay is also appropriate. It clearly addresses both
opinions and provides a number of points to support each argument. The
ideas are clearly explained and will not cause any misunderstanding for
someone reading the essay.

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