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Body 1: Pros
Body 2: Cons
Body 3: Cons
The structure therefore supports the opinion well i.e. more benefits than
drawbacks. 
Now take a look at the model answer. 
Model Answer
Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in
remote and untouched areas is a necessity.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
As countries around the world continue to modernise and develop, there is
more consumerism, industry, and transport and a corresponding need for
more gas and oil. One option to meet this demand is to find it in otherwise
untouched and remote places, such as the North Pole. However, I believe
that doing this is not the right solution.
There are benefits to such a strategy. This is firstly the fact that people wish
to improve their living standards, particularly in developing countries, and
fuels such as oil and gas allow this as they enable the heating of homes, the
running of cars and planes, and the production of goods. All of these result
in higher living standards, and thus we need to keep finding new sources
since we will eventually run out. 
However, despite this, there are major problems with exploiting untouched
and remote locations. One issue is that we will end up potentially
jeopardising what are beautiful landscapes. For instance, an area which
countries would like to drill is the Antarctic, home to many glaciers and
animals such as polar bears and penguins. Drilling here would harm the

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habitat, and in particular, any spillages would be disastrous to the
environment.
Not only this, due to health issues and global warming we should no longer
be seeking to use such forms of energy. It is evident that the use of these
fuels on a wide-scale has led to the pollution of many cities and the
subsequent poor health of its citizens where car use is so high. Also, carbon
dioxide is getting released into the atmosphere, and this may be endangering
our very existence. Therefore, we should be aiming to utilise more eco-
friendly options such as wind and sun for power and electricity for cars.
To conclude, although there is an advantage of finding new places to get oil
and gas, which is that we can sustain and improve our living standards, the
negative impacts outweigh this as we will damage those environments, as
well as continue to harm our health and the planet. 
(345 Words)

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Comments
This oil and gas essay would get a good score as it clearly answers the
question by discussing the pros and cons of seeking alternative sources.
Ideas are provided and supported. And an opinion is clearly stated and this
opinion is reflected in the essays ideas and structure. 
It is well-organised with a clear introduction - introducing the topic followed
by a thesis statement. Each body paragraph has a central idea and the
opinion is again summed up in the conclusion. 
There is a good mix of topic related vocabulary and examples of complex
sentences and structures. 
The essay is 345 words. If you are a lower level candidate you may need to
decrease the amount of words to around 275 to make sure you can write and
check your essay in 40 minutes. 

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