However, an in-person story allows children to interact with it - asking
questions, adding their own creative input and immersing themselves in this
new world, with their parents along for the adventure.
The interpersonal
nature of reading to a child allows them to use their own imagination to
create a visual world for the story, an important form of creative expression
for growing minds. The aspect of time spent together is also important to a
child’s development. In a world where children
spend time alone with
screens for stimulation from a very young age, it’s important that they also
receive one-on-one time with parents to develop interpersonal skills and
meaningful relationships.
There is no denying that access to a wide range of stimulation for children
can provide many of the benefits of traditional
storytelling such as
stimulating concentration, imagination and curiosity., but in my opinion, it
is not a replacement for the tradition of telling stories. One-on-one time,
interaction and a different form of creative expression are only some of
these benefits that would be lost if we left all
forms of entertainment up to
books, TV or movies.
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Comments
This essay for IELTS would achieve a high score because it answers the
question, discussing both the opinions, with the writer also giving their own
opinion.
It is a clearly organised essay, with each body
paragraph based around one
central idea. There is also a good mix of vocabulary and grammar, used
correctly and accurately.
It would also get a high score for Task Response as it gives a lot of relevant
information, with ideas expanded on and discussed fully.
This though makes it 373 words. You'd have to be a very confident and
high level writer to write that much accurately and coherently in 40