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@thompson english IELTS Model Essays

Dependent on others for:
Positive self-image
Support in our busy lives
Independent because
Families live apart
People want privacy 
Now take a look at a model answer.
Notice how each opinion is clearly expressed in a separate body paragraph,
and the writers opinion is also the second body paragraph.
Model Answer
Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on
each other, while others think that people have become more
independent.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It has always been the case that in certain ways our lives are intertwined with
the lives of others. However, in the modern era, some people believe that
dependency between people has increased, whereas others believe that
people have grown to be more independent. 
One reason that people think we are more dependent on each other is
because of our reliance on others to provide a positive image of ourselves.
People are bombarded these days with pictures of beautiful models and
people who seem to have perfect lives. Many people therefore feel the need


to go on social media, such as Facebook and Instagram, in order to post
pictures and they need others to get as many ‘likes’ as possible. In addition
to this, because of the hectic and busy lives some families lead, it is argued
they are dependent on others to support them, such as with grandparents
helping to take care of their grandchildren because the parents don't have
time. 
However, despite this, overall I believe that people are generally more
independent. This can be seen in the way that so many people live away
from their families and lead their own lives. For example, families used to
live nearby to each other, but nowadays people often reside in different cities
to their parents and siblings or in other countries, seeing each other only
rarely in some cases. Not only this, people prefer more privacy than in the
past and do not require help from others, seen in the way that neighbours
these days often do not know each other or interact at all.
In conclusion, although in certain ways people are more dependent, it is
generally the case that people now live more independent lives. Only over
time will it be revealed as to whether this is a positive or negative
development for society.
(305 Words)
Comments
So that is the best way to answer a question like that. 
You must make sure that you clearly discuss each opinion so it's best to just
discuss each one within a separate body paragraph. 
It is a difficult question but don't spend too long thinking of the best ideas as
the key is in the way you present and organise them.



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